I'M NOT GOING ANYWHERE, THIS WILL NEVER EVER GET PUBLISHED, BUT I STILL ENJOY SEEING HOW OTHERS VIEW IT ALONE?

Yes, I enjoyed it, maybe a little over elaborate on the wording, but still very enjoyable, keep up the good work! I don't see why you are so negative about getting your work published, its very good, and better than a lot I've read before, so go for it!!!! Good luck